LOl!!

One of your absolute best haiku!
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Perfection achieved
Hernia not funny, ouch
Yum, menudo, yum

I have got to make more time to check the planet. I almost missed this. Hilarious Haiku. Menudo indeed!

Stop laughing. Right now.

Oh dear, too late.

Too little too late; a day late and a dollar short. The story of my life summed up right there.

I'm sorry, it seems I've taken your misfortune and make it about me.


I had a client who was so good at this she made it an art form. Here's one particularly amusing example:

Dawn: "Something terrible happened to me at the grocery store yesterday."

Me: "What happened?"

Dawn: "I was standing in line to cash out and the guy in front of me punched the cashier in the face."

Me: :|

Me: "That must have been horrible for you. More so perhaps for the cashier?"

Dawn: "I was shaking all night. And I had to wait forever to pay for my groceries."

Haiku from customer service
 

Not a Haiku
 

Heart ripped out, arteries
Hanging by a thread
Blood pooling on the floor
Soul vacant, trust gone
Sadness moved in
No room for anything else

http://i1235.photobucket.com/albums/...D8B5DCCA-1.jpg

Never mind.

Bad Haiku, continued
 

Tears now drying fast
Accepting reality
Head removed from vice



*
n
vice
(Engineering / Tools) an appliance for holding an object while work is done upon it, usually having a pair of jaws

Gogyohka:
• 5 lines of free verse
• No set syllable pattern
• Short & succinct lines, governed by the duration of a single breath
• Captures an idea, memory, observation or feeling in a few compelling words


I bet we can have some fun with this...:)

Example:

Sole commander of my ship

with the flow

I go

and the pen

is my alter-ego.

by Ruth Berdah-Canet

The beach, whether it be bay or ocean

I can breathe freely and at peace

The sadness lifts and my spirit soars

I will remember always and forever

When I was loved

:rrose:

Difficult Hollylane!
 

This is my shorter version trying to use Gogyohka principles. It is difficult!

~The beach

sets my spirit

Soaring and free

Remembering when

You loved me~
_________________________


Gogyohka

• 5 lines of free verse
• No set syllable pattern
• Short & succinct lines, governed by the duration of a single breath
• Captures an idea, memory, observation or feeling in a few compelling words

It's been
4 weeks
28 days
672 hours
40, 320 minutes
I still breathe

Before and after

Joy at finding love
Wonder at the feeling
Touching your soul, finding it open and receptive
We were in the same place
My head on your chest
Listening to your heart beat
Reading your thoughts, feelings, hopes,
love and need for me in print
Pouring out of you
Hearing your ache for me
Missing me
Wanting me
Saying you wanted to grow old with me
Then
I allowed myself to believe, really believe
Loved you unconditionally
Openly
Totally
Completely
With my whole heart, soul & body
Allowed myself to feel my need for you
Now and always
Shared that with you
Shed tears
Missed you so
Still believed we were in the same place
Only to find
A minefield of words
My hope and dreams for the future
Now gone
Still trying to understand
How it became
Before and after

No more looking back
Instead, looking ahead now
New butch very cute!

:moonstars:

Non Haiku
 

Enough heartache and pain
Time for healing and forgiveness
Honor the love that was
Even though it is no more

I wrote this sometime last month but don't remember when exactly. Hopefully it's not too bad.


I can see you
standing over there
a reflection passing
thousands of miles away
a breath
a pause
eyes a gaze
my way
but you can't see me
loneliness that's like
fingernails down a
blackboard
I see you
a shimmer
a breath on my neck
I want to plunge my hands
into your skin
to drown
in the scent of you
like the softest cotton teeshirt
that you've had for years
my hands on your back
I feel like a cat in
heat
from you
that you
for me
fill me

Two forward, one back
Trying to move on today
Back is the hardest