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Kast · 09-12-2012, 06:05 AM

To improve, learn or to confuse myself - I sometimes go study a Master's style to see what I can learn from them. I have found that the more I learn, the less I know. Ok, finally testing the analyzer to see if it is on or off target. Here's one I wrote as a tribute to William Blake in the 9 Words:

Fluid, round, stone, brook, life, sang, polish, tone, & quiet

"Tribute to William Blake"

You are a sick, sick rose!
The invisible round worms
That eat man's souls
Have found a place in your bed.

The many, the few, the one...
Let the fluid of your black blood
Cast out life in the brook's song
Let no stones be polished.

The tone of your voice
Is likened to a hissing snake
So quiet you think we cannot hear,
That you are one sick, sick mf'er!

Most everyone is familiar with his "Sick Rose", let's see how close I am to his?:

"The Sick Rose
By William Blake

O Rose, thou art sick!
The invisible worm
That flies in the night,
In the howling storm,

Has found out thy bed
Of crimson joy:
And his dark secret love
Does thy life destroy."

The analyzer says I write like J. K. Rowling (I'm just thankful that I write like somebody). It wasn't in the style of Blake with his 'O' and 'thou' and 'thy' - for sure, it was more of a 'theme' thing that I was stealing... (and as you can see - I didn't steal too much, lol) ok, I'll try another one later. The jury is still out on the analyzer...

Does anyone have an idea of what my and Blake's poems are about?

09-12-2012, 06:05 AM	#13
Kast Member How Do You Identify?: butch Preferred Pronoun?: hye Relationship Status: in love with her Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: europe Posts: 185 My Photo Gallery Thanks: 391 Thanked 513 Times in 125 Posts Rep Power: 2413939	To improve, learn or to confuse myself - I sometimes go study a Master's style to see what I can learn from them. I have found that the more I learn, the less I know. Ok, finally testing the analyzer to see if it is on or off target. Here's one I wrote as a tribute to William Blake in the 9 Words: Fluid, round, stone, brook, life, sang, polish, tone, & quiet "Tribute to William Blake" You are a sick, sick rose! The invisible round worms That eat man's souls Have found a place in your bed. The many, the few, the one... Let the fluid of your black blood Cast out life in the brook's song Let no stones be polished. The tone of your voice Is likened to a hissing snake So quiet you think we cannot hear, That you are one sick, sick mf'er! Most everyone is familiar with his "Sick Rose", let's see how close I am to his?: "The Sick Rose By William Blake O Rose, thou art sick! The invisible worm That flies in the night, In the howling storm, Has found out thy bed Of crimson joy: And his dark secret love Does thy life destroy." The analyzer says I write like J. K. Rowling (I'm just thankful that I write like somebody). It wasn't in the style of Blake with his 'O' and 'thou' and 'thy' - for sure, it was more of a 'theme' thing that I was stealing... (and as you can see - I didn't steal too much, lol) ok, I'll try another one later. The jury is still out on the analyzer... Does anyone have an idea of what my and Blake's poems are about?