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Hollylane · 08-18-2012, 09:28 AM

My first attempt at Gogyohka:
• 5 lines of free verse
• No set syllable pattern
• Short & succinct lines, governed by the duration of a single breath
• Captures an idea, memory, observation or feeling in a few compelling words

I think I may have missed the mark on "succinct"...

Anyway...Here it is:

Is what you are experiencing
Through lengthy conversations
With eagerly parted lips
enough to know both the satiation and the hunger
of wholehearted love?

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08-18-2012, 09:28 AM	#29
Hollylane Practically Lives Here How Do You Identify?: . Preferred Pronoun?: . Relationship Status: . Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: . Posts: 11,495 My Photo Gallery Thanks: 34,694 Thanked 26,359 Times in 5,875 Posts Rep Power: 21474862	My first attempt at Gogyohka: • 5 lines of free verse • No set syllable pattern • Short & succinct lines, governed by the duration of a single breath • Captures an idea, memory, observation or feeling in a few compelling words I think I may have missed the mark on "succinct"... Anyway...Here it is: Is what you are experiencing Through lengthy conversations With eagerly parted lips enough to know both the satiation and the hunger of wholehearted love?